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GA Review

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Lead
  • Needs to be substantially longer per WP:LEAD. The lead needs to summarise the entire article.
Early career
  • This section flits around a little chronologically. For example, I think his birth should be mentioned first.
First year
  • Flits around again. His ranking in 2001 is given before his ranking in 1998.
  • "Fu's subsequent performance was disappointing, and he slid back down the rankings." POV and needs referencing.
Rise
  • "Fu is a prolific break-builder.[7] He achieved his highest break of 147 in 2000 at the Regal Scottish Masters[4] and has compiled 147 competitive century breaks during his career." Short paragraph. I would move this to another paragraph.
  • "terrible season" POV and needs a reference.
  • "suggested he would not go far in the tournament." POV and needs a reference. Surely this is what snooker, like any sport is about anyway? Form goes up and down.
  • "In what Snooker Scene magazine described as "one of the greatest upsets in the history of the game"," Needs a reference.
First title
  • "Marco had used Griffiths for a short while some years ago" Do you know when and for how long?
  • "and it was an emphatic fight," POV and needs a reference
Recent times
  • Very short and stubby. Is there reason for a new section at this stage?
  • "Following a disappointing loss in the previous tournament," POV and needs a reference. Why was it disappointing?
Style points
  • Scores should use endashes, e.g. 5–4, per WP:DASH
  • Seasons should also use endashes (not slashes), e.g. 2000–01 season, per WP:DASH.
  • Emdashes should be unspaced per WP:DASH. A number of other hyphens within text need to be consistently emdashes.
  • References should be placed immediately after punctuation where appropriate, and there should be no space between the punctuation or word and the ref tag. See WP:CITE.
  • Numbers and their units need to be broken by non-breaking spaces, e.g. 147 competitive centuries.
  • Numerals less than ten should be spelt out in full per WP:MOSNUM, except for scores.

Quite a bit to do, but I'll put it on hold. Peanut4 (talk) 21:55, 1 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your review, Peanut4, I'll try and improve the article using your points above when I have the time. - Nick C (t·c) 14:01, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
No worries. I'll try keep it on hold for an extended time if you want. It may also be worth trying to get a third party copy edit. Peanut4 (talk) 14:03, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Could you put it on hold for an extended time please, I'm going to be busy in the next few weeks (maybe months), so I might not always have time to check Wikipedia. Thanks. - Nick C (t·c) 16:02, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
The normal timeframe to put an article on hold is seven days. I will extend that a little bit. It might be best to update any progress on my talk page at regular intervals. Peanut4 (talk) 16:15, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

"He is best known for" is going to be hard to verify and comes across as POV. Stick to listing his greatest successes in terms of ranking points? --Dweller (talk) 14:12, 3 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I'm sorry, I probably won't be able to improve this article in time. I hope someone else can. - Nick C (t·c) 17:45, 4 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    Peanut4 (talk) 18:48, 12 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]